my coming of age story idea.

the brief plot:
there's boy his dad dies and his mothers an alcoholic, so he has to look after his family, even though he's only 17 years of age, he goes to detention at school frequently because he is always late for school, as he puts his little sibling needs before his own, which includes: dropping them off at class even though he begins his fine art class at 9am, which is the same time his sister start school, this is a little problematic, as he may be failing one of his classes because he doesn't complete the homework, because he spends most of his afternoons doing household duties, like making dinner, washing clothes, helping his little siblings with their trig homework, his class this girl recognizes his situation, helps him with his work, and they form a friendship where later, she helps him around the house, freeing up time for him to study and catch up with any overdue work.

how it starts:(the story goes in a weird order + lots of flash backs) all over the course of 10 mins. non diegetic music will be playing in the background.  (somewhere around these lines not actual thing).

(all happened in a flash back) a over the shoulder shot of memorial (boy in the right hand corner taking up a third of the screen, he is blurred and camera is focused on the memorial, low key lighting),.... (transition)....  (back to reality, low key lighting) him helping his sister with home work (medium close up shot of the two on the table) and in the back ground a women sitting on a sofa (it goes from the focus on the boy and his sister and the background blurred to them blurred and the women in focus and visa versa).... (transition)..... boy and little girl holding hands walking to school with his little sister ( long shot on the side (left)  which backtracks as they walk)..... (transition)...... boy and his friends walking to school joking around (again a long shot on the side (left) back tracking),...... (transition).... walks into class late and sits at the back (medium shot tracking and stops at his desk (close up) filmed from the right hand side (eye level, close up) he looks to the left at a girl then focus changes to a girl with him looking at her.).... (transition).... the boy walks into detention and sits next to the girl (film match on action walking through the door, as walks into the room every thing blurs and the detention sign prominent, focuses back on the boy) girl smiles at him (close up arc shot tracking thing (doesn't brake the 180' rule) to see boys reaction: smiles back).....(transition).... boy and girl walking home (shot from the back, medium shot) they end up holding hands..... (transition)..... walks in to house (cut in).... (transition).... (flashback)... mother, father, him and sister sitting down (lighting is bright, everyone smiling, wide shot).... (transition).... (back to reality).... mum sitting on sofa watching television and sister runs up to boy (low key lighting, camera back tracked into medium close up) walk passed the mum....... (transition)..... cooking pancakes for him and sister (medium shot from right hand side of him cooking) he puts pancakes on table and takes one to mum (camera stays focused on the little girl and boy goes out of focus as going to give the plate to him mother, low key lighting)........ (transition) ..... tucking his sister into bed then lights off (medium close up of boy and sister from the bottom to the bed, black screen when lights off then skip to next day at school)........ (transition)...... girl and boy are talking on a bench after detention in the grounds of school, girls face drops and she gives the boy a hug (background blurred, natural outdoor lighting, mood music as there is no dialogue)... (transition).... they are walking into boys house and are working on homework, girl gives boy headphone and they smile at each other (room light is on,  non-diegetic music plays out load (music from headphones)..... end